Saturday, October 2, 2010

Zahrah Zakiya Ahda / 209221416624

The Beauty of Indonesian Tourism Objects

         Nowadays, global warming has become the main problem all over the world. Many natural beauty ruinned by human. Therefore, most people look for something that is more beautiful and natural. Most of beautiful tourism objects spread all over my country, Indonesia. As the biggest archipelago country in the world, my country has a lot of natural tourism objects that have never been visited. Compared with other archipelago country, for example Philippine or Thailand, the natural tourism objects in my country are more unique and splendid. Thus, to me, my country has the most beautiful tourism objects that you can not find anywhere else.

         Indonesia, as a tropical and archipelago country, has a lot of beautiful tourism objects that are worth seeing. For example is beautiful natural beaches with white sands which are spread in every island. Many beautiful beaches are still natural and have not been seen by foreigners. They have white sands, turquoise seawater, diamond blue sky, and smooth running wave. Those make them really worth seeing.

         Beside the beautiful beaches, the Indonesian tropical rain forest also attracts foreigners to visit them. Take for example, Borneo and Papua tropical rain forest which lush, dense, and preserve many rare animals. Moreover, Indonesia has also unique and attractive conservation islands, which keeps very rare animal found only in Indonesia. They allow us to discover many colourful birds, bats, pythons, and many rare animals, like Orangutan, Babirusa, and also Anoa.

         The other example on Indonesian beautiful tourism objects is the unique and attractive Komodo Island. In this conservation island, we can find Komodo dragon, a large species of lizard that can be found only in Indonesia. These huge lizards become the main attraction in Komodo Island. While tourist witnesses the life of Komodo dragons, they can also enjoy beach in the island which is called “Pink Beach”. It is named so because of small red sands spread out in the white beach sand area. The stunning panorama surrounding the area is unforgettable. The islands' underwater life is also amazing when the tourist do scuba diving. All of those beautiful and attractive places are still natural and has not been ruined by some irresponsible people. Thus, Komodo island really show the unique and attractive of Indonesian turism object.

         From all of the explanation above, it is clearly stated that the Indonesian natural tourism object has not been ruined by human being. Take for example the Indonesian natural beaches, like Pink Beach, and also the conserved rainforest in Indonesia. Although Indonesia, Philippine, and Thailand are archipelago countries, Indonesia has its own attraction. So, based on the two reasons above, Indonesian tourism objects are more unique, more splendid, and more worth seeing than other tourism objects in the other archipelago countries.

4 comments:

  1. Zaza,

    the feedback is on the topic sentences. Your topic sentence is sometimes not there where it has to be. When there is one then it may not be parallel with the other topic sentence.
    You can do better than this if you work extra hard. Good luck

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  2. you'd better use "which" instead of "that"in formal writing.

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  3. if i were you, i'd rather not to give any examples in the last paragraph since it is a concluding paragraph :)

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  4. i was thinking that you use turnabout to begin your introduction paragraph, but then i found it is not appropriate with the next sentences that u wrote. hehe :D

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