HIV - AIDS
Health, prosperity, and economy are some important aspects that government should think about but I believe that the most important thing of those three aspects is the people’s health. It is because nowadays there are many viruses that attacks people’s health; for example, mumps, chicken pox and measles, even a common cold. Otherwise, the most dangerous virus that attacks human is HIV (Human Immunodeficiency Virus). It causes Acquired Immunodeficiency Syndrome (AIDS). AIDS is one of the deadliest epidemics in human history. It was first identified in 1981 among homosexual men and intravenous drugs users in New York and California. Shortly after its detection AIDS quickly develop into a worldwide epidemic, affecting virtually every nation. The United Nations Program on HIV/AIDS (UNAIDS) estimates that the worldwide number of new cases of HIV infection peaked in the late 1990s with more than three million people newly infected each year. However, some regions of the world, especially Vietnam, Indonesia and other countries in Southeast Asia continued to see an increase in the early 2000s. Well, maybe some people think that there are many aspects which support the development of AIDS. However, I believe that there are only two basic aspects, health and social, which makes AIDS become a worldwide problem.
The first aspect is health aspect. AIDS can become a worldwide problem because there are too many ways that makes HIV infections spread, for instance: sexual intercourse with an infected person, contaminated blood, and transmission from an infected mother to her child before or during birth or through breast-feeding. The first way, HIV transmission occurs most commonly during intimate sexual contact with an infected person, including genital, anal, and oral sex. The second way, direct contact with HIV-infected blood occurs when people who use heroin or other injected drugs share hypodermic needles or syringes contaminated with infected blood. Sharing of contaminated needles among intravenous drugs users has been a primary cause of HIV infection in ports of Eastern Europe and central Asia. Then the third way, HIV can be transmitted from an infected mother to her baby while the baby is still in the woman’s uterus. The virus can also be transmitted through the mother’s breast milk during breast-feeding. That are some example ways that makes AIDS become a worldwide problem.
Then, the second aspect is social aspect. Actually the social aspect is supporting the health aspect that I have explained. Well, I will give you an illustration; we are living in modern era with all of its social transformation, the people’s lifestyle is also changes, drugs abuse and free-sex are become usual lifestyle. The people in modern era are easy to stress because of all their full daily activity and; therefore, they are looking for some enjoyments such as drugs abuse and free-sex. Eventually, those enjoyments become their lifestyle and the lifestyle makes the spread of AIDS easier. The other social change is the people’s characteristic. In this era, people turn into individualistic person, they are no longer care to the others. They prefer to think and care about their own business; for example, when someone knows others who having drugs party he/she will prefer to abandon rather than to forewarn them. That is because; he/she thinks that is not his/her business and simply thinks that it is their right to have their own way. For the result, those two examples of social change make the HIV become easier to contaminated people who live in this modern era.
As we discussed above, from the health aspect we know that sexual intercourse with an infected person, contaminated blood and transmission from an infected mother to her child before or during birth or through breast-feeding are the way how HIV infection spreads. All of that way makes AIDS development is swift. While from the social aspect we know that people’s free lifestyle and individualistic characteristic are the aspects that cause the HIV be easier to infect people. Finally, there is no suspicion to say that those two aspects are the basic cause to make HIV-AIDS become health universal problem all over the world.
The organization of your essay is good. However, I believe that next time you write another essay, you need to make it become five-paragraph essay. This is not an ideal one to have only four paragraphs.
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yes mam...
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I'll do my best..
Hi mitha,
ReplyDeleteWow, your essay has opened my mind.
That nightmare is true and we have to face it.
I think your essay is already knowledgeable; also the development of your thesis statement is already relevant.
I do like your diction.
Keep fighting and trying sista =)
your essay is well-organized
ReplyDeletethe content is clearly explained
but still do the best :)