Sunday, October 3, 2010

FENNY AGUS TIANING DEWI

THE ADVANTAGES OF WATCHING TELEVISION


"The idiot box", this is what people say about television, for it makes children do not want to play outside or do active activities. Many people think that watching television can influence children’s way of thinking because the children imitate everything what they see in television, for instance Spongebob Squarepants. In this program there are so many violence and pornography. Most parents have wrong perception because they do not think the positive aspects of watching television. Some television programs broadcast news programs or documentary film which can give their children more important information. So,watching television may give children a lot of benefits.
Firstly, watching tv can develop their knowledge. There are so many TV programs offer interesting and useful information, such as documentary film about nature or technology for example the National Geographic channel. Another TV program which can give us a lot of benefit is the news program. Within a minute, we can also watch the latest news from all over the world without reading first in newspaper.
Next, by watching TV we can also entertain ourselves. Sometimes there are some TV programs which lack of information or quality but good enough to make us laugh, for example comedy TV show like Opera Van Java. Some people who are really stressful maybe need the thing like this to relax and forget the problems that they have for a moment. For another group of people maybe like to enjoy musical TV shows. While listening some classical or jazz music they will feel more relax and calm down.
Actually, watching TV is efficient to spend our spare time. We can get lots of information in a short time by just sitting on a couch. It will not the same if we are reading magazines or newspaper. For busy people, time is important. In their free time, they can have a quality time together with their family.
The wrong perception about watching TV has misled us. In fact, we can get a lot of knowledge and fun by watching TV together with our family and friends. but it will not be good if we just watch TV all day long and doing nothing. So, I say that watching TV is not a waste of time because of its benefits.

4 comments:

  1. Dear Fenny,

    The organization is clear but your topic sentences were not well-developed.

    Practice more and do better next time.

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  2. Hi Fenny

    I love the way you open the first paragraph :)

    I'm not a big fan of commentary, but let's just do what we should do :D

    * "...because the children imitate everything WHAT they see in television " why not "THAT" ?

    * pay more attention to punctuation, Fen.

    * watch the use of definite and undefinite article: the and a

    *..."It will not the same" --- what about "It will not BE the same"

    that's it I guess, Fenny. Let's work harder together!

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  3. Hi fenny,

    I do like your essay. You state a common issue, and then develop it well.
    Your using of easy diction also makes this essay quite interesting.
    May be you have to concern with your mechanism in this essay.

    Keep fighting sist. =)

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  4. simple, but clearly explained
    good job Fenny :)

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