Monday, November 8, 2010

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Similarities between Elephant and Whale

There are many animals in this great world; Starting from the biggest animals to the tiniest animals, from the wild ones to the tame ones, from the cutest ones to the ‘beast-like’ ones. They all exist in this world. By this large number of animals, of course they have their own characteristic, to distinguish one to the others. Even there are differences of the animals which come from the same class, like sea mammals and land mammals. Of course, there are so many kinds of mammals, especially sea mammals and land mammals. Both of those animals are mammals, right? So, absolutely, they have similarities even though they seem different. It is caused they live in different habitat. For example, elephant as land mammals and whale as sea mammals are different, but they are similar in physical characteristic and the existence nowadays.


First, the elephant resembles the whale in size. Like elephant, whale is considered as one of the largest animals. The elephant is the largest animal in the land and the whale is the largest animal in the sea. Both of them are the greatest mammals in the world. In addition, some kinds of them has the same typical skin, too. They have gray-colored skin and have body hair also. Then, like the other mammals, the whale also has lungs to breathe air, although it lives on the water. They also have four-chambered heart. Besides those organs, the elephant and the whale is classified into mammals because they are warm-blooded animals. They maintain a high body temperature. Moreover, as mammals, both of them give birth their young and also have mammary glands with which they nourish their babies. Mother whales cares for their calf for an extended period of time. Usually, they care their babies at least a year, feed them with nutritious milk and protect them.


Next, the more amazing is they are also held in cultures, mythology, and religion in humans life. For whale, it takes places in mythologies around the world, like in China, Austria, New Zealand, Canada, Africa, and even in bible. It very famous in the part of the bible when Jonas being swallowed by a whale for three days and three nights in the whale’s belly. For elephant, it very significant in India and related to Hindu Buddhist religion. There are Ganesh, who an elephant-headed Hindu deity, Airavata which an elephant ridden by the Hindu god Indra and Erawan, the Thai version of Airavata. In Sanskrit, it is called Gaja. Both of them, seems really enormous in those historical part of humans life.


Unfortunately, these mammals are endangered and going to extinct nowadays. They have been hunted for decades, even centuries, by humans. Humans hunt them for commercial uses, like sell the elephant’s ivory and the whale’s meat. Humans also use them to get profit, humans use them in industrials, put them in zoos or circuses and even for foods. These hunting has bad effect to their populations, it will decrease their number of populations. By then, there will be only a few of elephants and whales in the world and our next generation will not know what the elephant and the whale are. These marvelous creatures will become a history.


Thus, even though these animals they have differences, they still have similarities. Those similarities make the world more beautiful and the differences can also complement each other. It makes the ecology and the life of the world balanced. Since we know about it, we should keep this balance by preventing hunting of animals, supporting the organization which protect them and keeping them from extinction.

3 comments:

  1. hii Yosi :)

    let me give some comment in your essay

    Sentence “It is caused they live in different habitat” (paragraph 1)sounds Indonesian, how about “it is caused by their different habitat”

    Your thesis statement only mention two things that you want to discuss, but actually there are three things; the physical appearance, relation between those two animals and culture, and the existence.

    I think the word “take place” in (paragraph 3) is not really suitable.

    You need to be before the word “significant” (paragraph 3)

    I think after the word “these” in (paragraph 4) you should use have instead of has. *correct me if i am wrong :)

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  2. Dear Yosi,
    my feedback is actually the same....your title. I want you to be able to have more interesting titles next time, ok?

    Zaza has given some feedback on your language...keep practising and good luck.

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  3. same with zaza ,i want to give some grammatical correction for you :)
    1 'they all exist in this world', i think you need to put to be after 'all'.
    2 'some kinds of them has the same typical skin ,too', u'd better replace 'has' with 'have'.
    3 'although it lives on the water', i think the whale lives 'in the water'.

    those are the correction from me ..
    you have a good writing so far ..

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